What are some do's and don'ts for the admissions essay?

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What are some do's and don'ts for the admissions essay?

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What are some do's and don'ts for the admissions essay?

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Former Admissions Officer Columbia, Brown, and Wesleyan University

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Partner McClure, Mailory & Baron Educational Counseling

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Suzan Reznick
Independent Educational Consultant The College Connection

Do engage the reader in a compelling story!

Don’t bore the reader; that is key to your success. The topic of your essay does not really matter, as long as you avoid the over-used topics- i.e. scoring the winning goal, my summer of community service. Other topics that might be considered “inappropriate” touch on Sex, Religion and Politics. You do not want to inadvertently offend your reader, so you need to also curb your use of “taboo” language. Your essay should be one that only you could write- it needs to reflect who you are. Don’t try to use big SAT words just to impress. Better to impress admission with your personal qualities. Clarity of thought is always preferred.

President www.CollegeEssaySolutions.com

No Salespeople, Please!

There are many do's and don'ts regarding the college application essay. A particularly critical "do" is to make sure that your essay stays on point. Applicants will sometimes digress, then fall in love with their digression and not be willing to cut it. Five hundred or less words isn't much, so be sure that the essay remains focused on fully answering all aspects of the prompt, as they are asked. One "don't" that I think is particularly important is to resist the urge to sell yourself. Essays that state, "No one could possibly be better qualified for your program than me," or some variation of that, risk a backlash from Admissions Directors. "Oh, really? Well, I'll be the judge of that." Instead, illustrate why you are so well qualified and let readers come to that conclusion themselves.

Tam Warner Minton
Consultant College Adventures

Do's and Don't for the College Essay

DOs Keep Your Focus Narrow and Personal Your essay must prove a single point or thesis. The reader must be able to find your main idea and follow it from beginning to end. Try having someone read just your introduction to see what he or she thinks your essay is about. Essays that try to be too comprehensive end up sounding watered-down. Remember, it's not about telling the committee what you've done -- they can pick that up from your list of activities -- instead, it's about showing them who you are. Prove It Develop your main idea with vivid and specific facts, events, quotations, examples, and reasons. There's a big difference between simply stating a point of view and letting an idea unfold in the details: ? Okay: "I like to be surrounded by people with a variety of backgrounds and interests" ? Better: "During that night, I sang the theme song from Casablanca with a baseball coach who thinks he's Bogie, discussed Marxism with a little old lady, and heard more than I ever wanted to know about some woman's gall bladder operation." Be Specific Avoid clichéd, generic, and predictable writing by using vivid and specific details. ? Okay: "I want to help people. I have gotten so much out of life through the love and guidance of my family, I feel that many individuals have not been as fortunate; therefore, I would like to expand the lives of others." ? Better: "My Mom and Dad stood on plenty of sidelines 'til their shoes filled with water or their fingers turned white or somebody's golden retriever signed his name on their coats in mud. I think that kind of commitment is what I'd like to bring to working with fourth-graders." DON'Ts Don't Tell Them What You Think They Want to Hear Most admission officers read plenty of essays about the charms of their university, the evils of terrorism, and the personal commitment involved in being a doctor. Bring something new to the table, not just what you think they want to hear. Don't Write a Resumé Don't include information that is found elsewhere in the application. Your essay will end up sounding like an autobiography, travelogue, or laundry list. Yawn. ? "During my junior year, I played first singles on the tennis team, served on the student council, maintained a B+ average, traveled to France, and worked at a cheese factory." Don't Use 50 Words When Five Will Do Helpful Hint: Do not send an essay expressing that your deepest desire is to go to Princeton and then send it to Yale. You would be surprised how often this really does happen.

王文君 June Scortino
President IVY Counselors Network

it is used as the personal statement for college

you should determine the core message for the college essay first and support it with evidences. the common mistakes are self centered essay and lack of personality.

Erica White
College & Career Counselor Middletown High School

The essay...

Do.... Keep your essay under 2 pages Write about one specific topic, experience, story Have an English Teacher proof read it Hook the reader with your opening Include your name or other specifics such as date of birth or social security at the top of the page Do not... Write about commonly used topics (ex. winning the sports game, how great your mom is) Write about controversial topics (abortion, drug use)

Helen H. Choi
Owner Admissions Mavens

Some Specific Writing Tips

1. DO write "small" -- that means be specific and detailed; 2. DO be concise – avoid flowery, overwrought language; 3. DON'T tell me that you are smart or compassionate or brave -- instead, show me with detailed examples; 4. DON'T use vague language 5. DON'T use the passive voice 6. DO use words wisely – don’t show off by using big fancy words that might be on your SAT vocab list but don’t fit your essay. (ex: plethora, myriad, epigram)